T1+Writing

__Tuesday 5th April 2011__ __WALT:Write an argument using persuasive features to convince people to visit the Bay Of Plenty__ __**WHY YOU SHOULD VISIT BOP**__ Do you hate having to travel all around NZ to find the right place for you? Well we have the place for you come to the Bay Of Plenty we are all fun to play with and we are good people to talk to. also you should come because we all strive to do our best in everything we do so head on over we will all be waiting for you.Plus there isn’t a better place than Bay Of Plenty we have everything like Skyline,Kiwi360,Wiamareno and lots lots more! we also enjoy fun games to play instead of staying home all the time an doing nothing we have the larges’t Intermediate school as well it’s called Tauranga Intermediate School were a child can learn anything they have over 1200 kids how cool! There are cool people in the Bay Of Plenty in-fact everyone is cool here.

In the BOP we all love to play games and sports like Rugby league and chess they are pretty cool games. We also have alot of clubs for kids like Rugby league clubs Rugby clubs Soccer clubs and Tennis clubs! we have lots of sporting equipment to use.People enjoy the Bay Of Plenty because it is a cool place and the kids get into a lot of sports. we win heaps of trophies even the schools do they win a lot more than the seniors. Also we have good views that everyone will love we have mount maunganui’s great view over the mount.There are heaps of fun parks around as well there are ones were you can get on a swing and others that you play sports on!

Bay Of Plenty have some of the most generous people in New Zealand they are very good people to talk to when you need help or anything else they will help you with mostly anything.Weather it’s sport directions to place or helping you with your problems on your work. BOP provides a lot of people with special abilities to write,read,sports and maths plus they are also very friendly there are people in the world that just want money to get everything and they are greedy whit money it’s like money is the whole universe to them it’s horrible.Ok back to reality there are places here that everyone will go even if they can’t afford it!

In the Bay Of Plenty area everyone strives to do there best in everything that they do! we also love doing things the right way.Almost everyone here are people that love to do the right thing so they don’t get told off.Also the Bay Of Plenty has lots of tourist attractions but the best one is the mount beach.Thats were all of the people go apparently barley anyone goes to the redwoods

These are reasons that BOP is the best place to go on holidays when you have enough time to so please come to the BOP area and have the best time of your life!

Fantastic introduction Dallas. Excellent attempt at using paragraphs and you are nearly there but some of your paragraphs contain too many ideas. Remember every new idea needs a new paragraph! You have some great reasons here just remember to restate them in your conclusion. You now need to focus on using stronger imperatives to really convince me! Please check your work and edit your spelling mistakes also! Overall a great effort Dallas, you are making good progress with your writing. Miss Crone :)